Cold Email mantra: Tell me something I don't know
Want to get more responses?
Tell your prospect something they don't know.
If you pique my interest—you'll have my attention.
Let's look at an example.
The cold email in the image was sent to me recently. Here's my gripe with this email:
- It's super generic
- It's making a big promise that they can lower my credit card fees
- It doesn't educate me at all
✅ The rewrite
Subject line: hidden fees
Hi Jason,
I'm sure with clients like Gong, Zoom, and Rippling you're dealing with large transactions.
You might be aware—but most consultants don't know about hidden charges behind the 3% credit card processing fees. Things like non-qualified downgrades, lost interchange credits on refunds, etc. account for 1/3 of these fees.
We recently helped a consultant recoup close to $30k in hidden fees like these.
Open to a quick chat to learn more?
David
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This definitely would have gotten a response from me. I have no clue about what those hidden fees might be. And it's obvious this is personalized for me and my industry.
How to put this into action:
- Look back at the "aha" moments for your prospects in sales calls
- You might find goodies in competitive battlecards as well
- Package up those non-obvious insights into short snippets
- Create an email like the one above offering to share and educate
Don't pitch how your solution is different. Speak to how the approach is different.
You'll get way more responses using this than asking for a demo.